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The Woodpecker Open in new Window. [E]
When Spring arrives they make themselves known.
by TheBusmanPoet Author Icon
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Rated: E | (3.5)
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Hello, TheBusmanPoet Author IconMail Icon. This is a review from "WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group" Open in new Window.! *Smile* I received "The Woodpecker" Open in new Window. via the random 'read & review' button. I have the following comments to offer.

*Quill*Reader Experience

Woodpeckers appear in Springtime where the author lives. He hears their sounds rat-a-tat-tating. Then he sees the babies, Each year the cycle reoccurs.


*Quill*Commentary

This is my own reading of what you wrote, as it read to me, feel free to disagree with me.

Reading your poem I could see a difference between your experience of woodpeckers and mine. Yours was clearly seasonal. The Woodpecker arrives in Spring during mating season. Here in Germany, I see Great Spotted Woodpeckers with their distinctive black, white and red feathers all year around. Apparently if you live in the mountains the experience here is more seasonal.

This poem lacked a description of the birds. My wife's a scientist and at a glance, she will say oh that's a male or that is a female. Apparently, the male has a red bit on its neck that is missing on the female. I am not as observant as her. But this enables her to describe the relations between the birds as they congregate distinguishing between the parents and babies and laughing with glee with the babies misbehave or act incompetently.

We have a good mix of tree types here. But the woodpeckers seem to nest further down our street in a massive ash tree.

I felt this poem lacked visual detail and authentic experiential observation of the birds.


*Quill*Mechanical issues

There was an irregular rhyming pattern here.


Thanks for sharing.

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