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Review #4709631
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 Comfort Open in new Window. [E]
A short contemplation on the phenomenon of death on a social being.
by Edified Ronin Author Icon
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Hello, Edified Ronin Author IconMail Icon. This is a review from "WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group" Open in new Window.! *Smile* I received "Comfort" Open in new Window. via the random 'read & review' button. I have the following comments to offer.

*Quill*Reader Experience

There's a comfort in death because everyone goes quiet and the ones who cared especially so. It is like a system update that takes a little time a paralyses communications while the computer is down.

*Quill*Commentary

This is my own reading of what you wrote, as it read to me, feel free to disagree with me.

I liked the analogy with a computer update that paralyzes a computer until it is complete. Losing someone important requires a major realignment of a lot of internal structures, mechanisms and processes. A major realignment needs to reoccur because a significant object of inputs and outputs assumed by the old system no longer exists.

What I did not understand is why the silence, while this realignment reoccurred, could be considered comforting. Is it comforting because you realize that a person matters and their dignity as a person in your life is somehow respected by the moment we take to adjust? Or is it comforting because it shows that love is real at least in some people, the ones not chattering incessantly at the wake?

I take comfort in the fact that those who died lived a life worth remembering and I take comfort in my religious beliefs about what happens to them after death, well at least with the good ones. The image of a bunch of black-clad mourners staring at each other in silence while sipping drinks is not that comforting really.


*Quill*Mechanical issues

You speak conversantly but there are some grammar rules that apply even then. I would recommend quillbot.com. The first two sentences illustrate what I mean.

There’s a comfort in death.

When someone dies everyone gets real quiet. ä When someone dies, everyone gets real quiet.




Thanks for sharing.

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