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 My Wishful Hope  [E]
Watching the impeachment hearings, I decided to write a poem of encouragement.
by Anna Marie Carlson
Review of My Wishful Hope  
Review by LightinMind
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: E | (4.0)
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Hello, anamc.poet. This is a review from "WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group! *Smile* I received "My Wishful Hope via the random 'read & review' button. I have the following comments to offer.

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If we could get along and work together through all the pains of this life then maybe the world would be a better place.


*Quill*Commentary

This is my own reading of what you wrote, as it read to me, feel free to disagree with me.

I liked this semi-poetic prose form as it was easy to read. I wondered if you could read this rapper-style. Rap is after all a kind of social critique that hopes for justice and a better world.

Maybe we are all a little blinded by our stresses and petty conflicts, turning to fight each other a little too glibly. If only we had the strength to bite our lips and step back a moment. If only our eyes were open to the real brokenness and wounds all around us. Knowing our own inability to heal all these hurts and fix all these problems should drive the best of us to our knees, to pray and love the world the only way that we can giving it to God of love and mercy who can make a difference.


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in stress - stressed


Thanks for sharing.


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