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THE STORY

A couple gets attacked by a vampire, but the trick is on him when the boyfriend turns out to be a werewolf.

WHAT I LIKED

I liked the twist and turns in the story. The quotation inspiration inspired the story.

POV NARRATION/TENSE

This is told in the third person omniscient. Narration shifts between characters without a line break which can be confusing to readers. I would suggest using line breaks. Past tense is used appropriately.

DIALOGUE

There's a good blend of dialogue and narration.

DESCRIPTIONS

There's enough to set the scenes.

SETTING

TIME: 1959
PLACE: Drive in

This is something that is clarified for the reader.

CHARACTERS

Johnny & Victoria

There's a lot of twists & turns in their relationship.

MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes.

PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

Suggestions as mentioned above. The opening engages the reader. If anything, the title "Patricia" doesn't really seem to match the story, as the woman in the story is "Victoria." Word count was listed in accordance with the rules. Good luck in the contest.