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 | His Beauty  [E] His beauty shines so bright. 16 lines. Rhymes.  |
| (4.5)| Hi Demon of Tricks and Treats ,Welcome to Writing.Com! I happened upon your poem and figured I'd leave a review.  Overall Impression: This is an interesting poem, dear author. It makes me smile - which is always a good thing! It speaks of such love and admiration. As it's in the Fantasy genre as well as Romance/Love I am not certain if it's how you truly feel about someone, but I hope so! It's a wonderful feeling when we meet someone we fall in love with that deeply. There is some nice imagery here: the comparison with Roman art, and with deities like Zeus and Thor, for example. They helped me build a mental image of this man, seen through your eyes. And as said, the love for his person is clearly felt throughout. On the technical side of things, I enjoyed the rhythm and flow of this poem. I had no difficulty following it. There is a consistent rhyming scheme, too. Well done! Suggestions: I do have a few suggestions, dear author. I hope that you will find them helpful!  ...striking any pair...I suggest placing the word of before 'any'. You use punctuation throughout most of your poem, which is great! There are just a few locations where it's missing - that might be worth a quick fix. I also suggest allowing the capitalisation at the beginning of each line to depend upon the individual sentences within the piece. That would perfect the overall clarity and reading experience. My final suggestion is not about the poem itself, but about your genre selection. You have selected a couple of genres - I would suggest selecting a third, too. Your genre selections help make your work more visible to other readers. They also help if your work gets nominated for "The Quills" [ASR], as they give you more chances to win an award!My Rating: I enjoyed this poem. It's creative and sweet. I am glad that I happened upon it. I did have some suggestions, but nothing major. Therefore, I will give this item a rating of 4.5 out of 5. Thank you for sharing your work. Write on! Kit    My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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You responded to this review 09/30/2022 @ 12:11am EDT