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 ALL I HAVE TO DO IS DREAM: award winner Open in new Window. [E]
The poet’s dream of a peaceful world
by Dr M C Gupta Author Icon
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Namaste, Gupta ji!
This one showed up on 'Read and Review'.
The title and brief description had me imagining something in the poem to come, and then I saw the genres and realised it was to be something else!

Well, you wrote it a long time ago, but it is still relevant today, so I'll go ahead and review it.

You paint a wistful picture of a world which is so desirable - and even possible, if everyone worked unitedly for it. It's unfortunate that narrow, short-term gains mean more to some people than the overall well-being of the planet and its inhabitants.

The rhyme scheme, verse structure and words chosen bring your message across powerfully. I must admit, while I've heard the term "Weapons of Mass Destruction" several times, I haven't come across the short form WMD before and actually had to look it up!

I appreciate the note you've given at the conclusion of the item, to put the poem in context.

Suggestions:
1. Due to the level of violence you describe, I'd suggest you change the content rating to 13+.
2. Somehow, the poem seems to end a bit abruptly. I think I'd have liked one more verse to sort of up it all up, if you know what I mean.

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- Sonali

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