Wow! This sounded so much like our covid times and I thought of those in hospital or nursing homes who could not receive visitors or those in isolation. How sad. Then I saw the prompt picture. LOL Yep, very dark.
The poem was moving and I was drawn into the tone and mood. It appears to be a free style poem though I liked the rhyme scheme in the first two verses and then it changes in other verses. I was just surprised the rhyme was inconsistent. Still I enjoyed the soundscape with the good use of assonance and consonance throughout.
The imagery is vivid with evocative lines like "the ones time froze", "the machine" and "blackness seeping and the idea of "distraction." Descriptions were clear in creating a dark vibe. I found a lot to think about in this poem and appreciate when I can enter into my own reverie while pondering your vision.
Thanks for sharing your vision and craft. It is good to see you back!
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