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Hello Doom


A call to action. At the same time, also a call for followers. Isn't the whole concept of followers the problem in the first place. If you look at your first sentence, asking for disciples, and then contrast that with the last sentence that shows how helpless the rulers would become if no-one follows - it seems there is a disconnect in the message.
A war to end all wars is another one of those contradictions. The only way to end war is peace. A war is never peace, thus wars don't represent freedom either.

This is the second item of yours that I read and I am not sure if you are ranting from your mind or if you are writing this to explore the minds of demagogues. Either way, the writing itself is clean, free from spelling or grammar mistakes, and easy to read.

Write on.

Annette
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