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Hawaiian Breeze  [E]
Hawaiian Breeze is my favorite scent from Glade.
by Sharmelloween's Expressions
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Rated: E | (3.5)
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The title made me think of nature, but in the brief description you clarify what the poem is going to be about.

I like the layout of the poem, the font you've chosen, the size, line-spacing and centering. I also appreciate the notes at the end.

The poem gives the message of your liking of this scent. A couple of things did confuse me, though. I wonder why some of the words begin with capital letters - are they brand names of other scents? Or do you want to emphasize them? Also, why is it spelled 'scent' sometimes and 'sent' sometimes -- is that on purpose?

Suggestions: You've repeated the word 'pleasant' in the first verse, would you like to change one of those? The middle two lines of the second verse tripped my reading a bit. Maybe you'd like to look at those again.

Thanks for sharing this poem.

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