Hello John Shenandoah,

Before anything else, I'd like to say WELCOME to WdC!!! I see that you have recently joined have jumped in with both feet! That's awesome! I hope you grow to love it here, as I have. If you have any questions, please don't hesitate to ask!

As a Co-Judge, I am reviewing this item for the following contest: "The 4 Controversies Contest" .

The topic for this round was "Faith" and what it means (or doesn't) to you. Your submission must be non-fiction with a minimum of 1500 words, personal and full of opinions.


Overall Impression:
I fully enjoyed reading this essay and it got me thinking on a lot of things, saying to myself as I read things like, "Ya, but what about...", or "Good point". This was a well thought out submission and clearly, a topic that has been on your mind.

Title / Description / Hook:
Your title choice was an attention-getter for me. The description line gives the author the opportunity to clarify the title and lure in readers. As I started to read your essay, the description made sense to me. I think your title could be used in the comparison of all faiths - not only do people not take the time to respect and learn the differences between them, they'd rather pick random lines and tear each other down.

Grammar and Mechanics:
These two quotes are included in your paper and it's not clear who they are credited to, if at all.
“The sea of faith was once too at the full and round earth’s shore.”
“but now I only hear its melancholy long withdrawing roar.”

I'm sitting and wondering if ubermensch should be capitalized. I think it should be, but not entirely sure.
PS: I'm also a fan of Nietzsche!

I did not see any blatant errors that warranted my mentioning them. There are a few style issues here and there that if modified could enhance readability, but overall a solid essay. For example:
This phenomenon is similar to a man putting a hole in his rowboat so that his neighbor might drown.
This phenomenon is like a man putting a hole in his own rowboat so that his neighbor might drown.
(Good analogy, by the way!)

Closing thoughts:
I look forwrad to reading more from you! This was a great essay!

Thank you for supporting "The 4 Controversies Contest"  with your entry! Without your participation, there would be no contest. You are appreciated! A small gift of GPs is attached. Keep writing!!!


Thank you for sharing your work.
Kindest Regards, Lilli

***Disclaimer***
The comments herein are just my humble opinions. Use whatever is useful; discard the rest. I'm not an editor, proof-reader, or any of the like. When I read and review, I am reading as a 'reader', to be entertained. I look to see how the piece makes me feel and if I can I visualize the story/poem in my head. You know your work better than anyone else! If I make a suggestion or a comment, it is meant in the spirit of 'helping' and I welcome the same when people review my work.


My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .