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 | The Roosters are Fighting  [E] The roosters are fighting  |
| (4.5)  Welcome to WDC from "Newbie Welcome Wagon" ! Greetings, Solitary! This is a nice tribute to a chicken you obviously liked a lot, provided this is a true story), and I like the way you told it. Your descriptions of Black Ayam were great, and even though he probably could never match up to True Blue, he still 'tried his luck' with the ladies when he had a chance. But now with True Blue gone, it looks like he's going to be the cock of the walk, so to speak, which is likely why he's crowing up a storm! Can't say I've ever read a tribute to a chicken before, but like I said, you did a good job with it. Great spelling and telling, but I did spot one tiny niggle: '...caught out in the cold loosing toes ' (losing) Kee ponw ritin gon, Solitary! It was a pleasure to read, and welcome to WdC! If you like to write, then you're going to love it here! PS-You might want to get your bioblock (biography) set up so we can know a little something about you (hobbies, favorite books/authors, location, etc.), but that's up to you, of course. PSS-And since you’re new here, perhaps you’d like to check out "Noticing Newbies" and introduce yourself to the rest of the community if you haven’t already.
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