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| (4.0)| This is your local Simply Positive Reviewer, here! Your writing has been selected for review, as part of Simply Positive's mission to bring more light on Authors here at WDC! First Impressions: Hello there, and thank you for allowing me to read and review your impressive poem, "Invalid Item" .  Granted, this poem reads like a mantra, almost like a "manifesto". We see it truly is a declaration of sorts, whereby we are literally given a picture without a frame, with words burning within the paper they were printed upon. Granted, doesn't sound like much of a manifesto, does it? But that isn't what this reviewer was referring to! Its the second half of this poem that finds me realizing that the author, in pointing out the world of the person in this poem, has an awful lot to say... Overall Impact: This poem's impact has much to do with how the person in this poem sees another; now whether this other person being addressed was...say, a former friend, or lover, or sibling or parent....we really don't know. And that is the power of poetry! It can be ultimately mysterious like this, capable of being so much to somehow inspire to think we've got many of the answers here, but then upon re-reading it, we find that might not at all be the case! But let there be no doubting the end, whereby the bitterness is ever so clear, nearly so clear as to be cut with a proverbial knife... For the author speaks of the black-hearted feelings in the earlier part of the poem, even to the realm of possibly giving in - which is a clear indication that there is an on-going struggle here - but for what, the reader asks? Over what? To what end? We spot the truth, partially at least, when the person in the poem allows that the truth, therefore, is beneath the surface. Beneath all the written words. Beneath all the intentions, whatever they may be...... Errors: No obvious errors seen here in this writing. Summation: We find this to be a poem that appeals to the senses of the reader on many levels. Not all is seen here, warns the writer, that is all that obvious. The true meaning is found beneath the surface of other peoples' realities. And so we have an ending, ever bitter, which is clear. We have what feels and reads like a victory song for the person in this poem, in addressing another person's attempt at deceit, at trickery, at all the past attempts to confuse.... and that person now knows that it was all in vain. I like poems like this, poems that make us think! I hope this writer goes on to write more poems like this one, and no matter what... KEEP WRITING!!!!!!!!  Once again, thank you for providing me the opportunity to read and review for Simply Positive; this also has been written in affiliation with
Yours, "Dr.J"  My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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