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 The Red Dragon's Castle Open in new Window. [13+]
Prince Holland forgot something
by Prosperous Snow celebrating Author Icon
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
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OVERALL IMPRESSION -
I like fantasy stories with Princess' and dragons, too bad the Prince turned out to be anything but Princely.

PLOT~
Kara screams from the tower, watching as Prince Holland and his caravan takes off, leaving her behind. She's a prisoner in the castle and wants to escape. She receives a scroll with a medallion telling her that the medallion will protect her from the Lord of the Castle. She takes the medallion with her and heads out of her chamber into the castle, in search of a way out. In the process, she encounters a dragon in one of the chambers.

CHARACTER(S)~DESCRIPTION~
Kara who is hearing her mother's words about never trusting a Prince ringing in her ears and coming true. The Dragon who is happy to meet Kara, as the Prince has left here there as a gift. And the bad Prince who has no trouble leaving Kara behind.

Good descriptions as Kara left the room with only a torch and slowly made her way down the stairs. I did wonder who her loyal servant was that sent the scroll to her.

DIALOG~
Mostly Kara talking to herself, and then the conversation at the end with the Dragon. That last paragraph was a bit confusing for me and I wasn't sure exactly what the medallion had to do with him leaving the castle.

TECHNICAL~
beware of his anger.

Your loyal servant

stopping every few minutes
House Greyjoy image for G.o.T.

This would be my name.
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