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OVERALL IMPRESSION -
The ending was a little confusing because I wasn't sure exactly who the woman was, what he saw or what happened to him.

WHAT I LIKED BEST -
You have really good descriptions of the island, the water, the seagulls and how dark it was that pulled me right into the story.

PLOT~
A man awakens in the water and has no idea how he got there. He can hear the water lapping against the shore and makes his way over to the beach. There he pulls out his dagger and searches, hoping he won't need the blade for protection. During his search, he hears a woman's voice and she begins to sing. He follows the sound,

CHARACTER(S)~DESCRIPTION~
The man who washes ashore and has no recollection as to how he arrived there. The woman with the soothing voice who I believe is up to no good, killing everything in sight.

You described the island well from his vantage point, and how he realized he was covered in mud. The fear was there as he floated, almost as if he couldn't move at all. The singing was a little creepy, which made his fear more real, especially since her voice had a calming and soothing effect. That just heightened the fear for him.

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