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OVERALL IMPRESSION -
Nice suspense in the short story. I kept wondering when I was going to learn what Mitch was doing hiding in the shadows.

WHAT I LIKED BEST -
The sacrifice Mitch made for the inventor. Nothing better than having a selfless character who goes to the lengths for the betterment of mankind.

PLOT~
Mitch sits waiting for his cue to help an inventor of a powerful machine escape to safety. Just as he's about to come out into the open, his com goes off he's being told to abort the plan. He only has one shot at this and makes the decision to follow through. He steps out of the shadows and goes for the inventor as four men hit the train station headed right for them. Mitch makes sure the inventor and his invention are safe and pushes him onto the train.

CHARACTER(S)~DESCRIPTION~
Good descriptions of the constant drizzle and the man waiting for Mitch to come and lead him to safety. I could easily picture Mitch hiding out and watching every move the man made before he stepped out and put his plan into action.

DIALOG~
There were only a few lines of dialog but they were important to your story. They gave Mitcha choice, and he took the most heroic one. The inner dialog at the end worked too as Mitch thought about his sacrifice and what that would mean for the future.

TECHNICAL~
A-An urgent voice
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