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Review by Jeannie🩻
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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*Holly1* General Comments & Reader Reaction:
Let me just say that I don't want to dream your dream. This is just too real for me! Dreaming of children being pulled into the hellfire makes me wonder, why is it innocent children that's in your dream? I would hug my child tight, too, after what you went through.

*People* Characters: Characters in the dream are young children that the author tries to save.

*SantaHat* Emotion, Mood & Atmosphere: The emotion is anxious, earnest, so intense that the author was drenched in sweat when she awakened.

The mood is enraged over not being able to help, exhausted after the dream came to an end.

The atmosphere was boiling hot, as young children were being pulled towards the hellfire.

*Reindeer* Setting & Imagery: The setting took place at home while sleeping.

The imagery is: "black hands of hell encompass multitudes of children" & "tiny hands stretch forth toward me."

*Snowman* Plot & Pace: The plot is a true story of a dream, also a premonition this author had.

The pace is quick, retelling all the horrid details.

*Candycanev* Themes: Dream or premonition?

*Candycanep* Structure & Consistency: The structure is sound, as the author retells her dream. It's consistent throughout.

*Candy1* Writing Style & Grammar: The author only gives her reader part of her dream. She is saving the ending for another time.

The grammar is without errors.

*Candy2* Favorite Lines: I reach out to them frantically screaming for them to grab my hand. Our fingertips almost touch and I can feel the heat boiling toward me, burning my arms, but yet I stretched my arms further toward the little hands. They begin to recede further into the abyss as the forces of hell reclaim them.

*Candy3* Overall Impression & Conclusion: This had to be horrific and so real! Your telling of your dream sounds like you're feeling this heat as you're trying to save these children. I just cannot imagine what this must be like, and I really don't care to find out. I'm curious about the ending, but I can understand why you're only relinquishing just so much information.

*RainbowL*WriteOn!*RainbowR*


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Jeannie🩻
I love the color purple! When I saw this one at Leger's shop I bought it.

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