This is a nice example of what I think of as 'found poetry' where an apparently 'mundane' piece of writing, such as a recipe or list of ingredients, can be taken out of its original context and given new meaning and emphasis within a poem. I suppose it's the epitome of discovering the 'mystical in the mundane' as encouraged by Coleridge and Wordsworth in Wordsworth's preface to Lyrical Ballads and Coleridge's Biographia Literaria.
What might need work
In the final line, I think you meant "ma'am", as in the polite term of address to a superior lady rather than "mam" which means mother.
You know, the contest is GC rated for a reason. You could nudge your poems a little more toward the risque!
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