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I am reviewing {item: 2095515} today as part of the "The Chapter One Competition." .
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Title and Author:

In the interest of clarity, I will be using the following conventions in my review:
Your Words: Bold Black{}
My Impressions as I read: Bold Green
Editing Suggestions:Bold Red

Plot::
A man is riding fast to find his brother. He finds him in a library of a castle. They are summoned to their father.

Hook:
Nice hook drawing the reader in to see why Duraneir is riding so fast and why the raven is staying so close.

Characters Development:

Duraneir (Neir) Bel - Human
Corriagar - Raven
Thealone - Human and Neir's brother
Kaeynan - 15 year old female page


Dialogue:
I enjoyed the dialogue. It was very precise which the piece definitely called for. I had no trouble realizing who was talking at any given time.

Punctuation and Structure:
That was what came of easily accessible learning; everyone hied (not sure what word you are trying for here) off with books as if gathering supplies for a siege.

....... He never could decide if he liked the smell or not. (excellent description of the library)

The colors of a stone well and the darkness within it that had once tried to claim a boy's life (need a period)

Closing Statement
I love a mediaeval flair to a story. You have done an excellent job at setting the scenery around what your characters are dong and thinking. Thank you for posting.

Starling