Hi ~ Aqua ~ ,

This review is a part of "Game of Thrones"  [13+].

Overall Impression:

Wow, this is a dark poem, dear Aqua. I understand where it comes from, though, with that picture prompt. And it is an interesting psychological piece, about a place I hope to never ever end up in!

The mind is fragile. It also works in ways that we don't quite yet understand. I once worked in a psychiatric hospital, researching files for trends in certain psychiatrical illnesses, and the experiences of the patients were so tragic. The mind can turn on someone, and it's not like other terrors that one can escape from - you're trapped in with it. Yet, sometimes there are glimmers of awareness and recognition, as this poem expresses.

On the technical side of things, I like what you have done with this poem. Good rhythm and flow. Excellent presentation. And I like your use of punctuation - very helpful to the reader, thank you!

Suggestions:

I have no suggestions about the poem's content. I like it just the way it is. The only thing I'd suggest is allowing the capitalisation at the beginning of each line to depend upon the individual sentences within the piece. This would perfect the overall clarity and reading experience.

My Rating:

A dark, powerful poem that packs a punch. It makes for a good read.

I did have one suggestion, but that's more of a personal preference. So, I will still give this item a rating of 5 out of 5.

Thank you for sharing your work, and write on!

Kit



My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .