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Review by NaNoKit Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Hi SB Musing Author Icon,

This review is a part of "Game of ThronesOpen in new Window. [13+]. *Smile*

Overall Impression:

This is a powerful poem, dear Sarah. It really struck me, because I have pondered the same thing, and I bet that many people have, or do, or will. Does love last whilst our bodies change? I would like to think so, because people age together, and what looks like a big change is really made up of tiny little changes that occur over time. It's not like we wake up with lots of wrinkles, grey hair, everything dropping down south all of a sudden.

Whatever the case may be, this poem is an honest one. It doesn't sugarcoat anything. Your imagery is strong, and paints a vivid picture of what changes time inflicts on our bodies. I like that straightforwardness.

On the technical side of things, your poem reads well. It has a pleasant rhythm and flow. I love your use of punctuation, and how you allow the capitalisation at the beginning of each line to depend on the individual sentences within the piece. This aids the overall clarity and reading experience.

Suggestions:

I have no suggestions. Not helpful, I know, but I could see no errors and nothing I thought could be improved upon. This poem works!

My Rating:

I found this to be a good, strong, honest poem. I am glad that I got to read it.

I had no suggestions. Therefore, I will give this item a rating of 5 out of 5. It deserves it.

Thank you for sharing your work, and write on!

Kit

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