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 Have you ever stopped?  [13+]
short but i like it
by alwaysandforever4376
Review by ~ Aqua ~
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
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Hi alwaysandforever4376 ! I am Aqua and the following are only my personal opinions. Ultimately, you and only you can decide what works best for your item.

I found your poem in the short poems on WDC and I selected to read and review this poem because I really liked the question in the title and it made me wonder what kind of a poem would it be and what is the question demanding. The poem that you wrote was short but very powerful and beautiful, for some odd reason, I was really touched by it and I found it deep and thought-provoking. I didn't find it that great when I started reading it but then when I read the last two lines, it was as if something clicked in my mind. I loved your poem and the flow of your poem was very good, there was not a single interruption and it flew well on reading it out loud. The vocabulary you have used in your poem is good, it is simple yet very powerful and effective in conveying your emotions to the reader, especially in the last two lines. My interpretation of your poem is that once people stop doing something, to relax, to watch something in peace, to be alone for some time, to watch the nature, the things beyond the eye can see, we get so dissolved in them that people might forget about us. Our fears are what bind us to what we are and what we do.

Just two suggestions for your poem, the 'afarid' in the second last line should be 'afraid' and the 'worl' in the last line should be corrected to 'world.'

Thank you for sharing your work with us!

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