"SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP" 

Hello, there, Newbie! Welcome to WDC.
This is a Simply Positive Review.

Divorce is as unique as the individuals involved. Sometimes a physical separation is sufficient to calm the troubled waters of being under the same roof. And, sometimes, remarkably, the couple remain friends, yet live their own path on life's road on their own.

I like how your story had a positive impact on both of you, rather than the fighting and bitterness. Kudos for that!

Observations:

I think you have a great essay in the works. However, as it is, it's a little bit choppy and rushed -- at least that's what the reader feels while going through the story.

I suggest developing the story more, letting the reader know a little bit about the history of the couple and how the marriage started down the road to splitting apart.

Try to slow the pace down a little, as this is a serious subject matter that many readers will be able to empathize with.

Avoid short, stark sentences and the use of abbreviations.

The conclusion should be more developed also, as the reader is curious as to how the problems were worked out in such a way that the couple remain friends, albeit living separately and remaining married -- at least on paper.

This is a fine specimen of a psychological divorce that also cuts the loss and pain of not having someone who is loved completely out of one's life.

I think that since suicidal thoughts were involved, there needs to be more development of that story and how those feelings got dealt with. If therapy was involved, which would have been totally understandable, it should be suggested that it was worth the effort to help bring things into proper perspective. Thus, readers going through the same thing will see the importance of taking care of their own health in mind, body and spirit at such a rough time.

As I stated above, this story has wonderful potential. Right now, it is merely and overview, a simple precis of a complicated issue.

Please continue to develop your story and let me know when you have finished it. I'd love to take a second look and find the answers to some of the questions I had as I read through this piece. I can also change my rating of the piece according to the editing done.

I had to change your content rating because the suicide content is not "E" rated, nor is it ASR.

Until next time--write on!

Regards,
WebWitch





My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .