Hello! I enjoyed reading your item and hope you can benefit from my review. I review as a reader first, then an editor . If you have questions about my review after you read it, please email me!


Favorite Part: The ending is beautiful. You obviously use your skill with poetry to paint flash fiction also.



First Impression:I like to read biographies in the ports before I review. I understand you got your first acceptance letter for something (poem?Prose?)you submitted; congratulations! I have my first acceptance letter for a poem with the editor's comments hanging over my desk. It inspires me to keep trying, keep writing.


Plot:Flash story about a special family night. Starts off well, kept my interest and ending great. Told as a memory for a young person in the future.


Ease of Reading/Flowablility (my word..):no issues. Smooth reading, paragraphs were logical and flowed well.


Descriptions:just enough, not too much.


Grammar/Sentence Structure:no issues


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