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Sarah, you probably haven't looked at this sweet story for a while but I love children's stories, so I thought I would take a look at this one.


Favorite Part:Your description of the apple and the setting in this story was great. I could picture the glass apple in my mind. I have always loved colored glass. I wonder if you have seen a glass apple like this one in real life?



First Impression: A sweet children's story about love with an interesting story in the story about a knight and his lady fair.


Plot: simple plot for probably grade school children. I could picture this story with beautiful illustrations.


Ease of Reading/Flowablility (my word..):You may want to look for the times you use the word 'pretty' and try a different word. Also, the beginning is a little slow and may not catch a child's interest as quickly as needed.


Descriptions:as mentioned before, the apple is well described


Grammar/Sentence Structure:no issues


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