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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hi there KerrieAnnS Author Icon. I found your poem in "I Write in December-January-February" Open in new Window.. Before I begin, please note that these are my views as a reader and are not meant to offend in any manner.

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Imagery Created

The poem reminded me of the ways I used to sneak past my mums to watch TV or to play video games, or to read a novel. I don't know with what thought you wrote this, but it reminded me of that only.

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Language, grammar and form

I have never written in Whitney form but it seems to flow perfectly, though in the end behave mischievously will do equally well as misbehave mischievously.

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Punctuation

Perfect! *Thumbsup*

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Favorites and Not-so-Favorites

The best section was the way you left the poem open-ended for the interpretation. I can think of many more situations the poem would suit.

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Other thoughts and suggestions

You have captured the thoughts nicely in very few lines, and very few words. It is a kind of art difficult to explore. I am giving it four and a half star for its simplicity and beauty.

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