Hello, Pimsley! I'm so happy that you bidden on my package in the Paper Doll Gang's New Auction. You rock! Your package consists of the following:
Three in-depth reviews of poetry.
Three thousand gift points gift certificate to Kiya's "Kiya's Sig & Banner Shop" . (If you haven't gotten it yet, you should soon. I already bought it.)
One 10 thousand gift points awardicon for my favorite poem of yours that I review.
This is an awesome poem, and I hope you enjoy reading my review of it just as much I did writing it. It is given with love and only to inspire and help. Please do not get upset or annoyed with any of my comments and suggestions. You do not have to use them. All that I ask is that you read over my review carefully at least one time and consider at least some of the comments and suggestions. Thanks!

Overall Impression: This is a poem about how someone truly hates someone with all they have. I don't particularly like the thought of this poem, but it reminds me of the world today. How bad it is. How it has so much hate and such a very little amount of love. If only there could be more people like the people on the Writing Dot Come Community.

Rhyme: Of course, in any poem, rhyme does not matter whatsoever. I do like poetry that rhyme because I believe it helps the reader get the rhythm and the flow of the poem more. It just sort of gives you more of a feel. Though some of my favorite poems, and some of the greatest poems on earth, do not rhyme. You don't seem to use any rhyme scheme or anything in this poem, though I do think that it is a very good poem. I only review things I like; so there's your answer for whether you were wondering if I was being nice or really liked your review. If I didn't like any of your poetry, I would have sent you an email asking you what poems you wanted reviewed (unless, of course, that was already part of the package). Check your inbox. Trust me, you won't find an email from me about the auction - if an email from me about anything.

Meter: You could work on your stanzas' syllable structuring if you would be willing to. Your syllable structure/count is: seven , six , five , five , six , six , seven , five , five , four , four , five , two , two , five , four , four , four , seven , four. You can see that it sort of jumps around. Some people think that the syllable structure can change in each stanza. Well, it should stay as close together as all of the other stanzas as well. For example, because the first stanza is seven and six syllables for the two lines, you should probably try to write all of the other stanzas like that as well; with six or seven syllables in both of the twp lines - unless of course you're writing free-verse.

Grammatical/Spelling Mistakes/Suggestions: In some of the stanzas, you have commas on some of the lines. That is just extra punctuation. I think that anyone who writes poetry will know that they have to pause for a moment at the end of each line and longer at the end of each stanza. So, for example, on the last line:
And deliver that is (no comma)
which you deserve
Also, in the stanza BEFORE the last stanza, there should maybe be a comma on the last line, going straight into the next stanza.
To not take you
into my hands,

and deliver all that is
which you deserve.
There are a couple more places like that. I'll leave you to find them. I think it helps people if they read it aloud to themselves and look at it very closely themselves. Good luck!

Title: The title is awesome for the poem.

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Disclaimer!!!

**REPEAT** This is an awesome poem, and I hope you enjoy reading my review of it just as much I did writing it. It is given with love and only to inspire and help. Please do not get upset or annoyed with any of my comments and suggestions. You do not have to use them. All that I ask is that you read over my review carefully at least one time and consider at least some of the comments and suggestions. Thanks!