Noticing Newbies

If it makes you feel any better, I do plan on re-writing it soon, once I get my sleep schedule back on track and can come back to it with a clear mind.

The intent will be to make it more cohesive, especially near the end, which admittedly feels a little rushed. Part of the problem was that my planned direction for the story changed part-way through, so certain things were introduced which then never materialized.

Hopefully this will mean I can find a way to add in some details and history where needed, lengthening the story somewhat, and making the climax natural enough that you don't feel like it needs to continue. :)

You've helped nudge me in this decision for it, so while I can't promise a sequel or anything yet, something like that will be easier after the re-write, once I abandon the cheesy, sci-fi themes I had originally planned. Gil himself will change a little, since his character honestly doesn't belong in this story unless I take it to a point which I believe would ruin the story as it stands.

Sorry for the rambling. I didn't know where else I could say this. :p

"There is wanting the unobtainable, and there is the obtaining of desire, and the greatest of these is the wanting. Especially since the object of desire usually turns out to exist only in some alternate reality, to be mocked by actuality."

-James Blish- "Cities In Flight"