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It's probably the height of narcissism to not be able to delete old email compliments. But, Lobelia is truly blessed , has been such a jewel, and she can often provide a great boost to my confidence in all things I've attempted here...as I attempt them.

That's what I like about your poem- straight forward poems leave me a bit flat,
to be honest. A friend complained about my own poetry once, saying it was too
"concept-driven", not concrete enough. My thought is: my life is painted in
layers of opaque paint. Poetry is a way to strip the paint so we can see the
wood grain below the surface. Smile{

On 12/15/2004 at 21:00:26, wrote:

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> In your review for "Freeform Creation" you said:

This is an incredibly complicated, layered poem- strong, strong images saying... what?

I think most of it went over my head, and yet... I am intrigued. I want to understand this, because I love the way the words sing and the images wrap around the deeper parts of my consciousness.

I think free verse suits your style very well. I hope you do more.

I like the final stanza best- is it describing the conception of a soul?
That's what it says to me.


Walkinbird 3 Jan 1892 sends:

Wow, I know I'm verbose and generally use a dense, turn-of-the Century form that drives most people nuts - but "layered?" That's such a compliment!

And you are picking up the "creation" as intended. It's kinda philosophical erotica. I can't seem to write about passion in a straight-forward way.